Assignment 2 feedback

I have got back my assignment 2 grade and it was not that good and certainly there is something I should work on. Generally, I have problem in determining the thesis and the main points of the essay and unfortunately that is the main thing in writing a summary. Mr. Victor gave feedback for my essay and he explained what I did wrong. From his feedback, I notice that my weaknesses are organization and context. I definitely should work more on organizing an essay as well as the context. I hope I could write a better essay next time.